Revision Reflection

THIS ASSIGNMENT IS A CONTINUATION FROM THE ARTICLE MOTHER TONGUE. I HAVE UPLOADED THE ASSIGNMENT AND IT RUBRIC. I ALSO UPLOADED THE WRITING PLAN YOU WROTE. YOU SCORED 75 /75.

FEEDBACK FROM INSTRUCTOR ARE AS FOLLOWED:

The claim identified was “that there is nothing for one to be ashamed of only when their parents are not native English speak.” The claim is clear and on topic. This will end up becoming your thesis during Weeks 5 and 6. Which is this week.

 

You identified an appropriate audience. As you move forward, think about what key points would help this audience accept the author’s message? What would resonate with this audience

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

ENG 122 Summative Assessment Part One Guidelines and Rubric
Feedback and Revision Reflection
Overview: In this module, you learned about some different strategies for revising your writing. In this assignment, you will review your instructor’s feedback on
your writing plan and consider how you will incorporate that feedback to further develop your thoughts as you prepare to write your first draft of the critical
analysis essay.
Prompt: For this reflection assignment, you will make some choices about your approach to your critical analysis essay based on your understanding of revision
and the feedback on your writing plan provided by your instructor. You’ll also discuss who your intended audience is and what you hope to accomplish with your
essay.
Specifically, the following critical elements must be addressed:
I. Feedback and Revision Reflection: Use this reflection to gather your thoughts and determine a strategy for writing your critical analysis essay based on
your instructor’s feedback on your writing plan.
A. Think about your experiences with revision in the past. What approaches to revision have worked well for you? [ENG-122-03]
B. What revision strategy from the Module Five content would you like to try when revising your critical analysis essay? [ENG-122-03]
C. Review your writing plan and the feedback provided by your instructor. How does this feedback influence your ideas about your selected
reading? [ENG-122-03]
D. What changes will you make to your analysis now that you have received this outside feedback? [ENG-122-03]
II. Audience: Use this part of your reflection to consider your audience and purpose.
A. Imagine that your essay will be read by an audience beyond your instructor. Identify an audience that might benefit from reading your essay and
describe some of this audience’s characteristics. [ENG-122-01]
B. What potential challenges could you have connecting with this audience with your writing? [ENG-122-01]
C. Identify some choices you can make within your writing to connect with this audience. [ENG-122-01]

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Rubric
Guidelines for Submission: Save your work in a Microsoft Word document with double spacing, 12-point Times New Roman font, and one-inch margins. Then,
check your writing for errors. Once you have proofread your document, submit it via the Summative Assessment Part One: Feedback and Revision Reflection
link in Brightspace
Critical Elements Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Value
Feedback and
Revision
Reflection:
Approaches to
Revision
[ENG-122-03]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
cites specific, relevant examples
of successful approaches
(100%)
Describes previous approaches
to revisions (85%)
Describes previous approaches
to revisions, but response is
unclear or cursory (55%)
Does not describe previous
approaches to revisions (0%)
11.25
Feedback and
Revision
Reflection:
Revision Strategy
[ENG-122-03]
Identifies a new revision
strategy to implement based on
the Module Five content (100%)
Identifies a new revision
strategy to implement based on
the Module Five content, but
response is unclear or cursory
(55%)
Does not identify a new revision
strategy to implement based on
the Module Five content (0%)
11.25
Feedback and
Revision
Reflection:
Influence
[ENG-122-03]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
explanation demonstrates
considerable thought and
contemplation of the feedback
(100%)
Explains how the feedback from
the instructor influenced ideas
about the selected reading
(85%)
Explains how the feedback from
the instructor influenced ideas
about the selected reading, but
response is unclear or cursory
(55%)
Does not explain how the
feedback from the instructor
influenced ideas about the
selected reading (0%)
11.25
Feedback and
Revision
Reflection:
Changes
[ENG-122-03]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
cites specific, relevant examples
in support of the explanation
(100%)
Explains how the instructor’s
feedback changes the analysis
(85%)
Explains how the instructor’s
feedback changes the analysis,
but response is unclear or
cursory (55%)
Does not explain how the
instructor’s feedback changes
the analysis (0%)
11.25
Audience:
Audience
Characteristics
[ENG-122-01]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
demonstrates a sophisticated
awareness of the audience’s
characteristics (100%)
Identifies the essay’s audience
and describes characteristics of
this audience (85%)
Identifies the essay’s audience,
but response is unclear,
cursory, or characteristics of
the audience is inaccurate
(55%)
Does not identify the essay’s
audience (0%)
15
Audience:
Challenges
[ENG-122-01]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
demonstrates a sophisticated
awareness of the challenges
connecting with the audience
(100%)
Identifies potential challenges
in connecting with the intended
audience (85%)
Identifies possible challenges in
connecting with the intended
audience but response is
unclear or cursory (55%)
Does not identify potential
challenges in connecting with
the intended audience (0%)
15
Critical Elements Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Value
Audience: Choices
[ENG-122-01]
Meets “Proficient” criteria and
provides an insightful
connection between the
challenges posed and strategies
necessary to connect with the
audience (100%)
Identifies choices that could be
made within the essay to
connect with the intended
audience (85%)
Identifies choices that could be
made within the essay to
connect with the intended
audience, but response is
unclear or cursory (55%)
Does not identify choices that
could be made within the essay
(0%)
15
Articulation of
Response
Submission is free of errors
related to citations, grammar,
spelling, syntax, and
organization and is presented in
a professional and easy-to-read
format (100%)
Submission has no major errors
related to citations, grammar,
spelling, syntax, or organization
(85%)
Submission has major errors
related to citations, grammar,
spelling, syntax, or organization
that negatively impact
readability and articulation of
main ideas (55%)
Submission has critical errors
related to citations, grammar,
spelling, syntax, or organization
that prevent understanding of
ideas (0%)
10
Total 100%

 

 

 

 

 

 

Quintein Coale

SNHU

Eng. 122 Composition 1

5/19/2021

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

1. What is the author’s claim in the selected reading? In other words, what do you believe the author wants their audience to learn or understand better once they’ve finished reading?

It is valid that the authors claim in the selected article on Mother Tongue is that when born into families where relatives are the case, parents make one learn English as their second language. It allows one to talk differently than those who are taught English as their first and primary language. The author of the article states that children whose parents lead have a different perception of language than those who might learn in school or who use English as their primary language. Amy Tan wants the reader to understand that there is nothing for one to be ashamed of only when their parents are not native English speakers. Through that experience and show up, one has to apply the verdict of present-day life, which shows that most readers can overcome any form of embarrassment which she felt in growing up. Most of the essential issues are applied towards one’s professional career, which leads to success. From the article, Tan explains that she is not a scholar or an expert of the English language where she has an incredible passion for the language and the different variances which come along with language variation. This shows that Amy explains that the broken English sounds more comfortable to her and has adapted it in the verdict of a great manner.

2. Have you identified new key points that the author uses to support their claim in the selected reading? If so, include them here. If not, restate the key points you uncovered in your Writing Notes assignment and explain why the key points from your Writing Notes have remained the same, even after conducting an active reading of the article.

Some of the key points which are considered in this article focus on education in the use of English and the general reflection about how ideas dissect language. The mother of the author is a Chinese native, which makes her have difficulty gaining respect when it comes to the manner of navigation of life in America. Tan and her joint spouse spoke at times broken English with each other after their progress in marriage which was an intimate issue that occurs between two different levels of people. Her mother goes to extend and says this is an example of her daily and mother speaking impact. “Why he does not my check already in two weeks late” is an example of the language that was imposed and broken in its accurate analysis (Tongue, 2003). So mad led to his lie in losing money where the author talks about the way she felt about her mother’s second language. Tan felt high ashamed and embarrassed about the issue. She mentioned how her mother uses her to translate daily from talking to the stockbroker and doctors office rationale.

3. Describe the author’s target audience: what group or groups of people is the author trying to reach with their message?

The article of Mother Tongue by Amy Tan targets mostly the audience of the first generation of Asian Americans whose parents spoke English with a certain accent. This is extremely limited on how the English reflect. Tans mother has the ascent of two languages that she says and includes native language, Chinese and English, which is considered the second language. The author has no impression of targeting Asian mothers only and on the other ethnic groups of people. Tan was also reaching the Americans who do not experience translating to their parent’s native language. A minority of the people who arise from America come to work to provide for their families. Again, a minority of the people usually take time off to spare time and go back to school to learn English and speak fluently. However, they still rely on children to teach them the new concepts on how to speak in English.

4. What choices does the author make within their writing to connect with this target audience?

The author’s writing style allows one to connect with her audience. Tan’s inventive writing has brought about aphorism in the article. Her main objective is to inform her audience and create an awareness of people’s lack of understanding based on the extreme English sentence structure. The author acknowledges the need for compromise and fluidity, which arise in communicating with people from diverse backgrounds. The target of the author’s audience is people of various diverse ethnic backgrounds. She is consistently making an effort to reach out and make sure that they feel comfortable at home while reading most of the materials (Tongue, 2003). Even though someone may acknowledge this impact on fluent speaking skills, it is good to be eloquent based on how the issue does not exclude people who can follow changes and diverse perceptions.

5. Explain your evaluation of the author’s claim: is the suit strong or weak? What evidence or key points from the writing best support the author’s claim? If you found the claim to be vulnerable, explain why the evidence or key points provided did not effectively support the author’s claim.

The author makes a unique, strong point in most suggestive matters though the language is broken due to conversation. Although she is repeating about herself and maybe there is a slight alteration, it is abundant to show moral view and inclusive view on the person extreme view which is valid. As indicated in the article, it is quite a common problem with the large portion having alignment with the American population. People should therefore keep in mind the idea of being more considerate than others. The present is not to say that we need to satisfy and enable non-English speakers to defend on mostly elusive and understanding key on communication (Tongue, 2003). It is an issue that needs acknowledgment, especially if it has an inclusive manner on how the fact of judgment works out. Tan is more repetitive and understands the idea of urgency towards any problem that might arise.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reference

Tongue, M. (2003). Amy Tan. The World is a Text: Writing, Reading, and Thinking about Culture and Its Contexts, 291. https://rowenasworld.org/syllabi/ENGL1302/Tan-MotherTongue.pdf